The following students, whose sample essays appear here, were admitted to schools including: Stanford University, Carnegie Mellon University, UC Berkeley, UCLA, UC San Diego, and Laguna Center for the Arts. WARNING: Please do not copy our students' essay for any purposes - it would be a violation of copyright and college administrations can easily find plagiarized application essays.
This is the original essay before it was edited:
The editing process of this essay:
This is the final version after editing:
Common Application - Register for an online account on the Common Application website and conveniently apply to several universities with this application.
List of Colleges That Use the Common Application https://www.commonapp.org/CommonApp/Members.aspx
Ivy League - Ivy League's homepage. Click the top bar to see each individual Ivy League school.
CollegeBoard - Register for the SAT tests here or find out more information about colleges.
ACT - Register for the ACT test here.
AP Central - Find information regarding the AP tests at AP Central.
As per our policy, you have to put down the deposit for Basic (UC) package and/or the deposit for Extra Service Hours at registration. If your child completes the essays before the end of October, you will be qualified for the Early Bird Discount. In that case, we will return the discount portion to you after the application process is completed.
MT Learning Center strives to provide quality, affordable service to our students. In order to reduce the operation costs, we have to standardize the process. Therefore, regarding Extra Service Hours, no matter whether a student is applying to only a few other colleges, or many more colleges, we request the same amount of deposit and return the unused portion of the deposit to you once the application process is completed.
If you use more hours than the deposit covers, you will have to contact our office and put down another deposit.
Everybody is unique. If your child needs more hours, you can purchase Extra Service Hours for them. The Extra Service Hours can be used for UC application too.
In that case, you will need to purchase another Basic package before you can purchase the Extra Service Hours for your student.
Sometimes students feel confident about the essays they write, but in reality, because of their lack of experience, students usually are unable to correctly gauge the completeness of their essays. Most essays, even if the students feel confident about them, still require a tremendous amount of editing. However, if your child truly does not need 5 hours of counseling, they can still use the rest of the time to work on financial aid or scholarship programs.
To provide college application services to our students, there are certain costs involved. That is the reason we require the participants to sign up for the Basic Package of 5 hours. You may sign up for the Basic Package and use the 5 hours to apply for other schools, but please be aware that other schools have different essay and application requirements. For example, Stanford has ten short answer/essay questions and it is unlikely that signing up for the Basic Package to apply to Stanford will be a sufficient number of hours. If your child does not want to purchase the Basic Package (whether to apply to UCs or other schools), there is no way MT Learning Center can provide the service to your child.
MT Learning Center will try the best to schedule your child as soon as we can, but due to the large number of students in some months, there are occasions that we are not able to schedule the meetings within your time frame. However, we guarantee that the first meeting will be scheduled no later than 7 business days after receiving the request, and that no more than 10 business days will elapse between meetings. Should there be a case that MT Learning Center's counselors cannot meet with your child within the guaranteed time frame, and thus you have to pay higher rates, MT Learning Center will be responsible for the number of days beyond the guaranteed time frame. For example, since MT Learning Center guarantees 7 business days for the first meeting, if our counselors schedule the first meeting for a day 10 business days after receiving the request, when calculating the rates, we will roll back 3 business days.
In case the 5 meetings are in different rate brackets, we will prorate the charges.
Yes, you may use the allotted meeting time to work on anything related to the college application, including discussion, essay editing, and financial aid/scholarship.
A well-written essay can only enhance a student’s application and chance of admission. The essay is a tremendous opportunity to paint a fuller picture of the applicant and highlight strong features and characteristics. Conversely, a poor application essay can damage a student’s chances of admission by casting doubt on otherwise impressive accomplishments, conveying that the student does not actually have the commitment or ability to write a polished essay.
On average, the prepared student requires the following number of hours to complete the following applications (hours listed only for popular schools, please inquire for an estimate for other schools):
For special pre-professional 7-year programs (such as Washington University in St. Louis, Brown University’s PLME, University of Rochester, etc.), and honors programs, please be aware that these additional essays may require more hours than regular undergraduate essays.
Please bring to the first meeting, if possible:
If you are very prepared:
Here are the UC essay topics for year 2015 freshmen:
"Describe the world you come from — for example, your family,community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."
"Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment,contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?"